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June 23 – 30

Aim: Compile an essay

Compile: “to produce a book, list, report, etc. by bringing together different items, articles, songs, etc.; to collect information in order to produce a book, list, etc.”(Oxford online dictionary, 2021).

  1. To produce: is to make something as you go… you don’t know what the final result will be
  2. Bringing together different items: this means that you have a) Similar data or content, b) Different data or content, and c) Same data but there are some differences.

Objective: Make your own essay. You have data and content so please decide what format you are going to write your main body essay paragraphs. For example:

  • Focus on Similar (a) and Similar with some differences (c)
  • Focus on b) differences and c) similar with some differences
  • Focus on a) and b) and c)

Then you have to select how many body paragraphs you need? For example;

  • 2 main body paragraphs
  • 3 main body paragraphs
  • 4 main body paragraphs

Content and Format: Your content helps you to decide your format, next your writing helps decide the content you want to use (focus in information), and then the format helps you to select the information you want to use, or not use.

This is a cycle. You write, check your format, change or keep your format, and continue writing. This is the cycle you constantly go through in writing.

Monday: bring your body paragraphs to class, I will check. Also I will tell you how to write:

  • Title: Highlight 2 or 3 sentences (yellow) that are important (or significant) in your body paragraphs; The first sentence of a paragraph is called the topic sentence; Also the final sentence is concluding (the main point) / connecting sentence (to the next paragraph); Make your title based on these sentences, and decide if you are going to ask a question or write a descriptive sentence. Write both. Reword your highlighted sentences.
  • Key words (highlight blue): these words are specific words/terms that are used in your topic; do a search for the words you think are key – how many times are they written; as well what words are used in every body paragraph; evaluate your body paragraphs and re-write words into your paragraphs. Write 2 to 4 keywords under your title.
  • Introduction
  1. Topic explanation – explain the topic/subject
  2. Give your motivation for writing about this topic/subject
  3. Paraphrase each body paragraph (1 sentence); by introducing each body paragraph
  4. Give your own opinion (short summary – 1 line) Word about my opinion and content in the body paragraph (I highlight light green)

AND your own opinion paragraph:)

  • In this paragraph I will base my opinion as a ‘ a second year university nutrition student’ who ‘believes that obesity in young children in Japan is increasing’. Make a connection between who you are (position) and your ideas/beliefs.
  • Base your opinion on the content (any body paragraphs)
  • Give the reader something to think about – ask a question (is based on the reader to think about their own opinion) to the reader; For example: Have you noticed overweight children more recently, than you did before?
  • Now you have to answer your own question. This is usually your final sentence!

Conclusion:

  • Summarize your paper
  • Include some content from every body paragraph
  • Revise your opinion based on your position / ideas or beliefs

June 15-20-22 Adv Vs. Disadv

Aim: To identify the advantages and disadvantages concerning a topic that you want to research; technology – icloud

Method instruction: to search sites concerned with a comparison. The terms used for comparisons change, for example, when we talk about diet (health related subject) we often use good points/habits and bad points/habits. Another example terms are often separated by ‘pros’ and ‘cons’, or commonly separated by advantages and disadvantages.

Teacher instruction A: Searching component (part or step)

  • do an exact search using the comparison key words: pros and cons of icloud technology
  • chose two websites; and label site one [S1], and site two [S2]

[S1] https://blog.bemopro.com/cybersecurity-blog/what-is-the-cloud-pros-and-cons

[S2] https://www.comparethecloud.net/articles/6-pros-and-cons-of-cloud-storage-for-business/

  • Make a Title [S1]: What is the ….
  • Make a Title [S2]: 6 Cloud ……
  • Read the information, and highlight the main points to identify the similarities and differences. To do this is a lengthy procedure; due to reading all the information.
  • If you can not easily identify the main points, or understand the similarities and differences – select another website

Teacher instruction B: Taking notes and linking together the similarities and differences. There are many methods for recording this data, but I recommend PowerPoint.

  • Slide 1 Paste your URL for [S1] and [S2]
  • Make two Title slides; slide 2 and slide 3
  • [S1] identify the main points (Slide 4) – type them
  • [S2] identify the main points (Slide 5) – type them
  • Begin to read all the information; paraphrase the text by adding a new slide for each main point
  • Paraphrase means to take a chunk/block of text (paragraph) and in your own words write the content in 1 or 2 sentences.

Teacher instruction C: create slides for every new (additional) content of information which is similar and different

  • Make titles: Similar content 1; Similar content 2… and so on; in adition you make Similar points due to different reasons.
  • Make titles: Different content 1; Different content 2… and so on
  • Rule: maximum of 5 Similar slides of content and 5 Different slides of content – Total maximum slides is 10
  • Each slide 1 or 2 sentence explanation

June 13 – Personal Profile

Aim: To identify aspects for creating a Digital Personal Profile

link (see example)

Task: Create your own personal profile in Word Document

You need to complete the following:

  1. About – including a picture
  2. Achievements – tracking your progress since JHS; HS; University (Research Publications)
  3. Message – the focus of this message is what you want to do as a university student at Gandai.

Format Objective: complete the following task section 1 to 3;

  1. Follow the writing style provided in the link example
  2. A new page for each section 1 to 3
  3. Include any pictures (profile photo) or achievement photos to support your content

Rewriting essay task

Aim: Is to do a re-write of any previous essay we did in class. However you can not select your first essay.

Two objectives: 1) Format and 2) Content

Format: Follow these objectives

  • after you select an essay, identify the format – writing style or outline: Title type; introduction type (paragraph or statement); the purpose of the body paragraphs; summary / conclusion; and finally the References.
  • then go through the content

Content: Follow these objectives

  • read the essay information
  • decide if this is the essay you want to re-write? (finally)
  • check your References; did you use the content well in your essay, or not; and also what other references (content) do you need to search for? Please search
  • how can you improve and add to the essay information

Format:

  • you can increase the word count to 450 words
  • and next you decide your format and then continue to search and record information from your references
  • continue this cycle: format to content back to format…

You are now at the draft stage: some limits include

  • write content for every section of your format
  • 375 words
  • teacher feedback based on format and content – Monday 14th at G32.

Manuscript essay explanation

Format
  1. Title & Author – separated as main author (1st name) the other authors
  2. Introduction – provides details about the purpose of the paper and reviews / introduces each section
  3. Micro teaching (section 2) and sub sections 2.1, 2.2, 2.3, 2.4 – are research subjects related to this study (research)
  4. 2.5 Research Question(s) – If there are two RQ’s – 1 is the initial research for the purpose of the study (decided before the study starts); 2 is a more specific question related to results (decided after the research starts)
  5. Always – section 3 is the method of the study. It is the how you do your study, where you do the study and also the reason for doing the study. Also, how you will collect the data of the study, and how you will analysis of the study.
  6. Section 4 – is the Results. Usually the results are presented for the research question(s). Results for RQ 1, then RQ2. The results are shown in text and also visual for example Plot graphs (in this case). For results (RQ2) the actual discourse (text conversation or feedback) is shown to provide results,
  7. In addition – Visual recording of the results was provided using a software program to create a tree diagram – I had mixed result data format (graph and student discourse), so I decided to make a format in tree digram to combine the results.
  8. Section 5 – Analysis of the results – what I think the results mean, and I also try and answer the RQ’s – by Drawing Conclusion of the results based on the information in section 2, because these people I reference in section 2 are the SE (Subject Experts). Its my opinion of the results, which I discuss, and relate to the SEs.
  9. Section 6 – Conclusion: links to the introduction as a summary of all the content
  10. References – 22 articles I read to create my research. FYI this research took me 2 years, while I have a full time job!
Subject (content)

How do we know what the content is of an article or report is?

  1. Read the introduction first, then the Methodology (S3), then read Section 2 – contains the connection of different content related to each of the content (sub sections)
  2. Next look at the articles in the Reference section at the end of the Manuscript, read the Titles of the research that was used to make this research.
  3. Scanning – a method where you read the Topic Sentence of a paragraph (first sentence); final sentence in a paragraph (summary of the content; Reading the visual data in diagrams, graphs and so on
  4. Discussion (S5) and Results (S4) – will give you deeper understanding of the content
  5. If you want to know more about this article and subject content, then read some other articles, from the reference section.

7. Objective opinion writing

Aim: To write an opinion based on the information given, called objective opinion, and the below mentioned points are 1) based on important techniques, and 2) to give you feedback on your previous essays.

Feedback and techniques: keep these things in mind:

  • when you think information is important or most important, write about it – what you select is your opinion on the content you want to cover (or review, or summarise)

  • select information given in the previous body paragraphs, you can not introduce new information, but when you write your paragraphs you can use new and different words (terms / terminology)
  • when you have to write a summary of the previous information; you can focus on any main point or main points of the body paragraphs. For example you can select Main Points from each body paragraph or only 1 body paragraph.

  • consider the most relevant main points to your opinion(s), but you can not introduce your own opinion (what you think), for example, based on your ideas and experience

  • sometimes when you don’t select content (from the body paragraph information or your ideas), you are expressing your opinion – personal based opinion
  • the main aim is to draw your own conclusion from the information – to think about the content and what it means? (Master Students: FOI, results, findings that are specific, or findings that are common, or uncommon….)

7. Full Manuscripts

Aim: To read a full manuscript, and comprehend the writing; a) Format; and B) General Content:

LInk here:

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Task 1: What is your impression about the writing format? explain your answer 100words

Task2: What is your impression about the general content? (you do not have to understand all the content specifically: or the language. explain your answer 100words

Please bring your summary to the next class – and we will read in break out rooms with each other.

6. Solution essays

Aim A: Solution essay

Method: follow the same format as the previous essay

Topic Statement: Why we should fear the internet!

Problem: There are a lot of problems on the internet

Writing Objectives: Follow this guideline;

  • Problem: select a specific area about the topic (internet) to prepare your essay; online shopping; using sms / sns; devices on the internet which track out internet browsing history; or select your own

  • Solutions: research the internet for 1 main solution; and 2 other solutions

What is a main solution (primary), and what is other solutions (secondary)?

  • A main solution is solution that normally everyone would agree with
  • Other solutions are also solutions that people may agree with or sometimes may not agree with

Writing Format: 3 websites

  • Body Paragraph 2 – FOI 1 – 50 words (problem 1); at the end of your paragraph write a primary solution to the problem; and also give your opinion (20-25words)
  • Body Paragraph 3 – FOI 2 – 50 words (problem 2); at the end of your paragraph write a primary solution to the problem; and also give your opinion (20-25words)
  • Body Paragraph 4 – FOI 3 – 50 words (problem 3); at the end of your paragraph write a primary solution to the problem; and also give your opinion (20-25words)

Another paragraph: extended solutions (additional solutions to the problems)

  • For each problem, include some additional solutions, and these solutions are also termed secondary solutions (are not main solutions, or are not the most popular solutions,,, but they are good ideas / concepts.

For example: template. You can change the words used in this template. It is only a guide.

Body paragraph 5

The main solution for problem one was _________________ . Other solutions also include ______________ and _______________ . Additionally for the next problem the solution given was ______________ . Another two solutions include _____________ and __________________ . The third problem had the main solution of ______________ and other solutions for this problem are ______________ and ______________ .

  • Objective opinion Paragraph 6 – 50words

What is an objective opinion? It is an opinion you have on the solutions you presented – wrote about. This means;

  • you might think a primary solution is the best
  • also you might think a secondary solution is better than the primary solution – its your opinion
  • or you might think that all the solutions are the same – or important!
  • agree / disagree with some solutions

Making a comparison, for example, Problem 1 and problem 3 you think the main solution is the best idea, or best concept. But in Problem 2 you believe that all the solutions are good.

  • Conclusion Type A or Type B – please select one type
  • Introduction

Aim B: To use double referencing for supporting your main points

Method: Using the same referencing system (numerical); look at the example below:

Recently there has been a lot of criminal activity targeting the theft of credit card details in major online shopping sites such as best buy (8%), and amazon (10%). [2][1].

References (for example)

  • [1]amazonurl 10%risk
  • [2]bestbuyurl 8% risk

Additional Objectives

Aim: To write an introduction which presents solutions to the problem

Introduction

  • sentence 1: introduce the problem
  • sentence 2: introduce solution 1 – your opinion
  • sentence 3: introduce solution 2 – your opinion
  • sentence 4: introduce solution 3 – your opinion
  • sentence 5: Say why it is important to solve this problem – your opinion

Aim: To write a Conclusion which summarises solutions to the problem

Conclusion

Type 1

  • sentence 1: summary of the problem
  • sentence 2: summary of solution 1
  • sentence 3: summary of solution 2
  • sentence 4: summary of solution 3
  • sentence 5: give objective opinion

Type 2

  • sentence 1: restate the problem
  • sentence 2: summarise solution 1 and solution 2 and solution 3
  • sentence 3: select which is the best solution and say why (based on information – your opinion)
  • sentence 4: final statement (personal opinion)

5. Solution and Objective Opinion

Aim Part A: A problem related to Japan “Obesity” and prepare a short essay to present the problems, and give an objective opinion based on the information.

Three body paragraphs relate to information in 3 websites:

  • Body Paragraph 1 – FOI 1 – 75 words
  • Body Paragraph 2 – FOI 2 – 75 words
  • Body Paragraph 3 – FOI 3 – 75 words

Objective writing: will be instructed in the next class (May 18th).

In your body paragraph write the main points. If the main points are similar – make a connection with the other paragraph. For example, This main point is also [similar / different ] to information in Website 3, paragraph 2. Then in Website 3: This main point was [ mentioned before in Paragraph 1 / not mentioned in the previous paragraph ].

  • Objective opinion Paragraph 5 – 50words May 18th

Steps in class: follow and participate

  • step1: find a definition on the internet for the topic, to identify key words. For example;

Obesity is a complex disease involving an excessive amount of body fat. Obesity isn’t just a cosmetic concern. It’s a medical problem that increases the risk of other diseases and health problems, such as heart disease, diabetes, high blood pressure and certain cancers.

  • step2: do a more specific search for information. For example;

obesity health problems in Japan / excessive amount of body fat in Japanese people / Obesity is a complex disease

  • step3: reading other websites is a way to “cross examine” the information.

Prepare a circle diagram on note paper, write the main points and then identify points which are same or different. You need websites that have the variation of information (range). Show me in the next class – zoom

Referencing

  • Reference – add you resource links / information at the bottom of the page, and use the number system [1] / [2] / …. in your paragraphs