Category: Spring 21

Objective: to complete and submit final; and wrap up course

Final Essay; submit your final essay; students read each others final essay in last class

Wrap Up:

• accomplished sentence structures (grammar + sentence objective in a paragraph) for various topics and paragraph formats
• vocabulary level for topics has improved through research on the internet and also usage (using) in essays
• build argument: we care about how we present our ideas in writing – increases the meaning of the essay content – well done; but of course you can improve with practice
• personal development in writing (everyones style is different), and please continue to write and develop your style – practice skills
• accuracy in writing by doing objectives based in this course will continue to improve writing structure
• do not focus on grammar

Super English: currently Super English is the spoken course for this program

• two times a week – different days (Tuesday and Friday)
• the current teacher is Kan Asano
• the focus of the class is to prepare for speaking in a natural setting (situation)

Previous Aim: Identify information and write short paragraphs: A) research; B) explain and provide details; C) give your experiences; and opinion

Aim: C) and give your experiences; and opinion

Writing Objectives C): When we give our experiences and opinions, it is important to know how to write them in an academic format. Please read below;

• it is important to only refer to the information you have written in the previous paragraphs
• your experience should relate to a main point or specific detail already mentioned
• your opinion should be based on a) your experience, or b) directly related to the text information
• do not over-focus on your opinion, rather make a link between the text content (previous research paragraphs)
• you can also predict what you think you would experience in a situation / in a condition (giving information about a topic / even that has no happened).

Aim: the first aim is to review your body paragraphs – read and verbal feedback (non-correction), secondly to check the criteria format from Mondays class,

Criteria: the importance of knowing particular criteria assists you to do the following:

• write a specific format intended for submission of your manuscript (essay)
• each Journal has its own requirements; for example its expected that you read previous articles to know the writing style (content), as well as format (APA 7)
• however recently, i) more guidelines have been given for journal writing, ii) the success rate of publication for academic papers is currently around 12-13%, and in some cases below 10% iii) competition of global networking and crossover of research in collaboration with international studies.

Aim: Compile an essay

Compile: “to produce a book, list, report, etc. by bringing together different items, articles, songs, etc.; to collect information in order to produce a book, list, etc.”(Oxford online dictionary, 2021).

1. To produce: is to make something as you go… you don’t know what the final result will be
2. Bringing together different items: this means that you have a) Similar data or content, b) Different data or content, and c) Same data but there are some differences.

Objective: Make your own essay. You have data and content so please decide what format you are going to write your main body essay paragraphs. For example:

• Focus on Similar (a) and Similar with some differences (c)
• Focus on b) differences and c) similar with some differences
• Focus on a) and b) and c)

Then you have to select how many body paragraphs you need? For example;

• 2 main body paragraphs
• 3 main body paragraphs
• 4 main body paragraphs

Content and Format: Your content helps you to decide your format, next your writing helps decide the content you want to use (focus in information), and then the format helps you to select the information you want to use, or not use.

This is a cycle. You write, check your format, change or keep your format, and continue writing. This is the cycle you constantly go through in writing.

Monday: bring your body paragraphs to class, I will check. Also I will tell you how to write:

• Title: Highlight 2 or 3 sentences (yellow) that are important (or significant) in your body paragraphs; The first sentence of a paragraph is called the topic sentence; Also the final sentence is concluding (the main point) / connecting sentence (to the next paragraph); Make your title based on these sentences, and decide if you are going to ask a question or write a descriptive sentence. Write both. Reword your highlighted sentences.
• Key words (highlight blue): these words are specific words/terms that are used in your topic; do a search for the words you think are key – how many times are they written; as well what words are used in every body paragraph; evaluate your body paragraphs and re-write words into your paragraphs. Write 2 to 4 keywords under your title.
• Introduction

1. Topic explanation – explain the topic/subject
2. Give your motivation for writing about this topic/subject
3. Paraphrase each body paragraph (1 sentence); by introducing each body paragraph
4. Give your own opinion (short summary – 1 line) Word about my opinion and content in the body paragraph (I highlight light green)

AND your own opinion paragraph:)

• In this paragraph I will base my opinion as a ‘ a second year university nutrition student’ who ‘believes that obesity in young children in Japan is increasing’. Make a connection between who you are (position) and your ideas/beliefs.
• Base your opinion on the content (any body paragraphs)
• Give the reader something to think about – ask a question (is based on the reader to think about their own opinion) to the reader; For example: Have you noticed overweight children more recently, than you did before?
• Now you have to answer your own question. This is usually your final sentence!

Conclusion:

• Summarize your paper
• Include some content from every body paragraph
• Revise your opinion based on your position / ideas or beliefs

Aim: To identify the advantages and disadvantages concerning a topic that you want to research; technology – icloud

Method instruction: to search sites concerned with a comparison. The terms used for comparisons change, for example, when we talk about diet (health related subject) we often use good points/habits and bad points/habits. Another example terms are often separated by ‘pros’ and ‘cons’, or commonly separated by advantages and disadvantages.

Teacher instruction A: Searching component (part or step)

• do an exact search using the comparison key words: pros and cons of icloud technology
• chose two websites; and label site one [S1], and site two [S2]

[S1] https://blog.bemopro.com/cybersecurity-blog/what-is-the-cloud-pros-and-cons

[S2] https://www.comparethecloud.net/articles/6-pros-and-cons-of-cloud-storage-for-business/

• Make a Title [S1]: What is the ….
• Make a Title [S2]: 6 Cloud ……
• Read the information, and highlight the main points to identify the similarities and differences. To do this is a lengthy procedure; due to reading all the information.
• If you can not easily identify the main points, or understand the similarities and differences – select another website

Teacher instruction B: Taking notes and linking together the similarities and differences. There are many methods for recording this data, but I recommend PowerPoint.

• Slide 1 Paste your URL for [S1] and [S2]
• Make two Title slides; slide 2 and slide 3
• [S1] identify the main points (Slide 4) – type them
• [S2] identify the main points (Slide 5) – type them
• Begin to read all the information; paraphrase the text by adding a new slide for each main point
• Paraphrase means to take a chunk/block of text (paragraph) and in your own words write the content in 1 or 2 sentences.

Teacher instruction C: create slides for every new (additional) content of information which is similar and different

• Make titles: Similar content 1; Similar content 2… and so on; in adition you make Similar points due to different reasons.
• Make titles: Different content 1; Different content 2… and so on
• Rule: maximum of 5 Similar slides of content and 5 Different slides of content – Total maximum slides is 10
• Each slide 1 or 2 sentence explanation

Aim: To identify aspects for creating a Digital Personal Profile

link (see example)

Task: Create your own personal profile in Word Document

You need to complete the following:

1. About – including a picture
2. Achievements – tracking your progress since JHS; HS; University (Research Publications)
3. Message – the focus of this message is what you want to do as a university student at Gandai.

Format Objective: complete the following task section 1 to 3;

1. Follow the writing style provided in the link example
2. A new page for each section 1 to 3
3. Include any pictures (profile photo) or achievement photos to support your content

Aim: Is to do a re-write of any previous essay we did in class. However you can not select your first essay.

Two objectives: 1) Format and 2) Content

Format: Follow these objectives

• after you select an essay, identify the format – writing style or outline: Title type; introduction type (paragraph or statement); the purpose of the body paragraphs; summary / conclusion; and finally the References.
• then go through the content

Content: Follow these objectives

• read the essay information
• decide if this is the essay you want to re-write? (finally)
• check your References; did you use the content well in your essay, or not; and also what other references (content) do you need to search for? Please search
• how can you improve and add to the essay information

Format:

• you can increase the word count to 450 words
• and next you decide your format and then continue to search and record information from your references
• continue this cycle: format to content back to format…

You are now at the draft stage: some limits include

• write content for every section of your format
• 375 words
• teacher feedback based on format and content – Monday 14th at G32.

Aim: To read a full manuscript, and comprehend the writing; a) Format; and B) General Content:

LInk here:

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Task 1: What is your impression about the writing format? explain your answer 100words

Task2: What is your impression about the general content? (you do not have to understand all the content specifically: or the language. explain your answer 100words

Please bring your summary to the next class – and we will read in break out rooms with each other.

Aim A: Solution essay

Method: follow the same format as the previous essay

Topic Statement: Why we should fear the internet!

Problem: There are a lot of problems on the internet

Writing Objectives: Follow this guideline;

• Problem: select a specific area about the topic (internet) to prepare your essay; online shopping; using sms / sns; devices on the internet which track out internet browsing history; or select your own

• Solutions: research the internet for 1 main solution; and 2 other solutions

What is a main solution (primary), and what is other solutions (secondary)?

• A main solution is solution that normally everyone would agree with
• Other solutions are also solutions that people may agree with or sometimes may not agree with

Writing Format: 3 websites

• Body Paragraph 2 – FOI 1 – 50 words (problem 1); at the end of your paragraph write a primary solution to the problem; and also give your opinion (20-25words)
• Body Paragraph 3 – FOI 2 – 50 words (problem 2); at the end of your paragraph write a primary solution to the problem; and also give your opinion (20-25words)
• Body Paragraph 4 – FOI 3 – 50 words (problem 3); at the end of your paragraph write a primary solution to the problem; and also give your opinion (20-25words)

Another paragraph: extended solutions (additional solutions to the problems)

• For each problem, include some additional solutions, and these solutions are also termed secondary solutions (are not main solutions, or are not the most popular solutions,,, but they are good ideas / concepts.

For example: template. You can change the words used in this template. It is only a guide.

Body paragraph 5

The main solution for problem one was _________________ . Other solutions also include ______________ and _______________ . Additionally for the next problem the solution given was ______________ . Another two solutions include _____________ and __________________ . The third problem had the main solution of ______________ and other solutions for this problem are ______________ and ______________ .

• Objective opinion Paragraph 6 – 50words

What is an objective opinion? It is an opinion you have on the solutions you presented – wrote about. This means;

• you might think a primary solution is the best
• also you might think a secondary solution is better than the primary solution – its your opinion
• or you might think that all the solutions are the same – or important!
• agree / disagree with some solutions

Making a comparison, for example, Problem 1 and problem 3 you think the main solution is the best idea, or best concept. But in Problem 2 you believe that all the solutions are good.

• Conclusion Type A or Type B – please select one type
• Introduction

Aim B: To use double referencing for supporting your main points

Method: Using the same referencing system (numerical); look at the example below:

Recently there has been a lot of criminal activity targeting the theft of credit card details in major online shopping sites such as best buy (8%), and amazon (10%). [2][1].

References (for example)

• [1]amazonurl 10%risk
• [2]bestbuyurl 8% risk

Aim: To write an introduction which presents solutions to the problem

Introduction

• sentence 1: introduce the problem
• sentence 2: introduce solution 1 – your opinion
• sentence 3: introduce solution 2 – your opinion
• sentence 4: introduce solution 3 – your opinion
• sentence 5: Say why it is important to solve this problem – your opinion

Aim: To write a Conclusion which summarises solutions to the problem

Conclusion

Type 1

• sentence 1: summary of the problem
• sentence 2: summary of solution 1
• sentence 3: summary of solution 2
• sentence 4: summary of solution 3
• sentence 5: give objective opinion

Type 2

• sentence 1: restate the problem
• sentence 2: summarise solution 1 and solution 2 and solution 3
• sentence 3: select which is the best solution and say why (based on information – your opinion)
• sentence 4: final statement (personal opinion)